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• Chapter 2 of Sunrisestar’s Adventure

  Sunrisepaw looked up at her mentor in excitement. Splashstream flicked her ears in annoyance. “An apprentice? Really? I need to talk to Grassstar about this.” She scoffed. Sunrisepaw felt saddened. Splashstream didn’t like her and didn’t want Sunrisepaw to be her apprentice. “I’m sorry, kit, but you need a new mentor.” Suddenly, Grassstar approached them. “You have a problem with my decision, Splashstream?” Splashstream shook out her fur and replied. “Nope. No problem at all.” Grassstar stared for a few minutes. “Good.” Flicking his tail, Grassstar walked away. Sunrisepaw stared at her mentor. “Time for the tour of the territory, kit.” Snapped Splashstream. “A-alright.” She stammered. As soon as they left camp, Sunrisepaw couldn’t believe her eyes. Trees were everywhere as far as the eye could see, And all the plants were everywhere. SunClan territory was awesome! “Let’s go to the Oak of Founders, the first tree ever claimed by the first warriors of SunClan.” Explained Splashstream. It took a while, but finally the made it to the Oak of Founders. It was a big, cracking oak. “Let’s go to Sunstar’s Beech next, the place where Sunstar made his ancient den when he was creating the Clan.” After they went there, they went to the Thunderpath, and the Four Firs. After that, they went home, tomorrow to explore the rest. Next chapter in Bramblestar’s Storm. -Feathermist

  By dragonleader1234

• Chapter 1 of Quietstep’s Secret

  “Mama can me and Desertkit go out and play,”he whined looking up to his mother from inside her stomach the Queen looked down with an annoyed face showing that she had been asked this question many times before”Quietkit and Desertkit I can’t even count how many times I’ve told you the answer,”she said”Then when can we,”the tiny she(Desertkit)answered back waiting for a response”Well that’s going to be a bit,”Quietkit sighed and look over to his sister sitting next to him watching her gaze back wondering what was running through her thoughts with that giving him something to do.At the sound of a swish he turned his head as a cat entered holding something in there mouth they slowly moved towards them dropping what was in there mouth and nudged it towards the two kits.He looked up to his mother right as she pushed him forwards Quietkit stood up and began wobbling towards the thing sniffing it a couple of times not interested in the cat”I see you have a very brave kit,”the cat finally spoke to brake the silence”who-who are you,”Desertkit asked wide eyed”I am Oakleaf Medicine cat of Cloudclan,”the Tom puffed there chest out in pride”Then where is our father,”Quietkit spoke up his voice sounded like a squeak”Aspentouch;your father,”Oakleaf paused for a moment to think sitting down on the mossy spread out of the nursery floor the walls were covered with fuzzy vines making the den warm and cozy”Aspentouch is right now out hunting,”he answered gazing into Quietkit wonderous eyes”Mother could father come visit us when he is albacore from hunting,”he looked back excitement in his voice making it suns like a purr “That would be nice,Oakleaf could you tell him,”she looked up to the medicine cat as he nodded”Thank you,”she smiled”Quietkit looked back around to the Tom”Well what does a medicine cat do,”he asked wanting to know more”Medicine cats heal the clan or all cats when there in danger we also talk to Starclan quite often,”Quietkit leaned closer what if I was a Medicine cat his mind was on the thought “That sounds boring,”Desertkit replied”Who would do that when you could fight for your clan,”she boasted knowing that she was going to be a warrior”Well it’s a choice we all have like how I need an apprentice,”he mewed a bit offended he stood up now in the mods for leaving”Well I’m off,”he left quickly what if I was a med one cat Quietkit thought I would pretty much be a hero -Next chapter in Mothflights Vision Thanks for reading😁

  By Story book teller

• Dear Pikachu Cinderance

  I know everyone has their own opinion, but don’t you think thats a bit harsh. It’s an amazing book and it’s not very easy to come up with an idea like making your own world with maps and clans and characters and such. By the way, great job to everyone one on the Erin Hunter team, just great job. People who like this should read Wings Of Fire, it is great too and written by Tui T Sutherland, someone on the Erin Hunter team. -OtterFang of Riverclan Stardancer the Night Wing

  By bahumbug123456789

• SandClans whisper (Shades Pov)

  Before this chapter starts I just want you guys to know this one is kinda short. It’s won’t be as long as the others because I’m not feeling like taking up too much of the story with her pov until time comes. So until then this will be her last chapter. WoodenPaw: About time! Also when do I get my warrior name? DunePaw: Whenever our time comes! Now come on I want to watch! “Stop!” Shade cried leaping towards Rose. But she was a mouse length too short and Dappled whisked Rose away. “You have no time for me, or our kits any more because this stupid she cat has taken all your time! You haven’t bothered to comfort me or our kits when Feather died! You spend all your time in here with her!” Dappled spat angrily. “Dappled I-“ Shade began. “Dappled I’m sorry you feel this way. If you want I can get a new Cave Guard. I’m sure one of the newest New-Namers would love to. It’s a great honor and we thank you and will thank Shade, if you want her to quit, for your protection. SpiritClan would be happy,” Rose mewed slipping away from Dappled and padding away before throwing over her shoulder, “Also it wasn’t just Feather who I killed,” WoodenPaw: I wasn’t expecting that! Dappled is so mean! DunePaw: No, Shade is! Who’s in the wrong? Dappled- Just wants to spend time with her mate Shade- Just doing her job SOMEONE IS! Who is it?!

  By RoseQuartez_Song writer

• Final chapter of CrowWing’s betrayal

  CrowWing looked at the clan with hatred as warriors turned their heads at him with unsheathed claws TurtleStar yowled “CrowWing.You have committed crimes against the clan you tried to kill your deputy and you killed a kit and you murdered HawkFeather.What do you have to say for yourself.” CrowWing snarled back “I have served my clan since I as an apprentice and I have trained 3 apprentices while SpeedingSky only trained 1 apprentice and she’s barely strong enough to be deputy.She would die in the next battle and when you know I’m the option it would be too late.Your a weak leader.”TurtleStar raised his tail for silence. The senior warrior who was also CrowWing’s littermate Mudcloud yowled “Traitor.” CrowWing looked up at TurtleStar and meowed “Well what are you gonna do about it.” TurtleStar looked down and hissed “CrowWing I sentence you to exile, if you are seen in our territory my warriors have the order to kill you.” CrowWing looked up and gave a sneer and began to walk out of the BogClan camp and he then turned to his best friend. “LeafWillow.Are you coming?” The grey Tom looked up and meowed “Of course I’m coming.”CrowWing and LeafWillow walked out of the camp and they spotted the abandoned two leg nest were Monty and his rouges,Krusty,Charles,Brush,Tails,Frost and Hawthorn lived.CrowWing knew that Monty would let them join their rouge group.Monty hated the clans more then anything.CrowWing trotted to the abandoned two leg nest and walked inside through the window and he trotted around the two leg nest with LeafWillow.Amber eyes glowed from the darkness of the two leg nest and light from the window showed Monty coming forward with Krusty and Hawthorn.Krusty’s stomach was swollen, carrying unborn kits inside.Monty then snarled at CrowWing “What are you doing here clan cat?” CrowWing snarled in reply “I am CrowWing and this is Leaf Willow.We have come for your help.”

  By slimswedee

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